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Monday, November 8, 2010

Skyscrapers and Brick Walls

City where I've never been
On my knees I rest my chin
Lean my shoulder to the side;
Against the garden wall I hide,

And here I dream; no place I've seen
No place I've known, or ever been,
But I imagine: lights so bright;
Streets slick-cold and wet tonight,

Buildings building their own heights
Platforms for the seagulls' flights
Glass and steel climb up the scaffold.
See the clouds above? They're baffled;

The earth sends up these silver spears...
Heaven's been wary of them for years.
Sky's just space, and it's space they're poaching,
Sharply scraping and encroaching.

City where I've never been
I have to blink and count to ten
To remember where I am today
The place I probably will stay:

Sitting by my garden wall
Familiar and no fun at all.
The city conquering the sky--
It's there I wish someday I'll fly.

12 comments:

  1. You are quite the talented rhymester...I thoroughly enjoyed this.
    "Buildings building" is really nice!

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  2. "The earth sends up these silver spears...
    Heaven's been wary of them for years."
    thats very sweet

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  3. Your mind is wondrous...the imagery you conjure had me thinking about the movie Inception...I agree with Evelyn...

    ...The earth sends up these silver spears...
    Heaven's been wary of them for years...
    ...

    ...magnificent lines.

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  4. Love the flow of your piece. Describes well the world of skyscrapers.

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  5. I am thrilled to read your entry,
    so smart and thoughtful words.
    well done.



    Here is one of my entries, an award is attached, thanks for the support.

    http://thursdaypoetsrallypoetry.wordpress.com/2010/11/08/my-sister-lives-too-far-away/

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  6. Cute little poem with a clever mix of images! Like heaven being wary of the buildings!

    http://jessicasjapes.wordpress.com/2010/11/08/my-fortress/

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  7. Great imagery.. your words were so perfect...'The earth sends up these silver spears...'
    Thanks for sharing..

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    Twitter: @VerseEveryDay
    Blog: http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com

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  8. I love this and saw the endorsement of your poetry from modernity's muse. I love the part about the "clouds being baffled." I always wonder what mother nature thinks of all our b.s. with building shit everywhere. Ha!

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  9. You guys are all so great! Many thanks for the comments! :D

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  10. http://itistimetothinkformyself.blogspot.com/2010/11/november-greetings-appreciations.html

    Special awards for you. Happy Sunday! xx
    Hope to see you at our potluck tonight.

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  11. How r u? It is a lovely day, I am pleased to be here and give my gratitude to you for your love at Jingle Poetry. Week 11 is open NOW,
    You are welcome join us for another week of fun, old poems or poems unrelated to our theme are welcome.
    Let me know if you need further assistance.
    you are the best!
    xoxox

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